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02:17pm 16/01/2012
 
 
csiguci
Title: June 30, 27 (Novus)/2038 (on Earth)
Length: 680 words
Rating: G
Episode: SGU - Epilogue
Scene: Chloe’s diary entry on the day of Young’s funeral [and kudos to any director who can make a visual sequence out of this all. I am afraid, guys, that in an attempt to write Chloe’s diary entry I wrote Young's obituary and in a terribly cheesy fashion. All good reasons to delete the scene. Lol].



We have buried the Colonel today. It was a small and quiet private funeral that was fitting for the man. I am sure a lot will be said at the public memorial tomorrow about his greatness – things that people never said or perhaps even thought while he was alive. Not that he cared too much about what others thought, for he was his own toughest critic. In fact, it is sad to think that he considered his life a failure because he never got us back to Earth or because Futura seceded from the community. In reality, it was a shining success, because we would never have survived without him on Novus or on the Destiny.

Yet, despite his very public life, I would much rather like to remember the private man. The man whom I often saw at the light of dawn returning from the river bank with a basket of freshly washed clothes: he often did the laundry before he woke his kids, made breakfast for them, sent them off to (pre-)school, and took care of TJ only to be out of the door for his daily work before all of us. Although his emotions were always guarded (perhaps less so with children), it was touching to see how he loved his kids and how patient he was with them even after the most grueling workday.

A small group of people helped him a lot in those days. He did not ask for it (he would not have voluntarily handed over a task he thought was his to do) and we never openly offered our help (out of fear that he would feel compelled to decline). But we vowed to make his life a little easier. We conspired to have someone leave a pot of warm food on his door step by the time he would return home in the evening so that at least there was no need for him to cook. We would whisk away and do the laundry for him when he did not outmaneuver us by washing it before we could get to it. When TJ got very sick, we took turns to help take care of her. We never talked about this: he was too grateful to thank (he was just not a man of words) and we thought it best not to remind him of the pain.

When TJ died, he had a hard time sleeping, which cut his short nights even shorter (did he ever sleep more than five hours a night in those years anyways?!). Often, he would just sit on his porch and stare at the distance. Matt would sometimes go and keep him company. At other times, Matt would insist he needed a fishing partner, hoping that fishing might provide Young with some relaxation (Matt hates fishing to this day). We found excuses to have Sarah and Stephen stay with us for a few days, but I doubt he spent those days catching up on sleep (after all there always seemed to be some task long overdue around the house or in the community) unless Eli (would you have thought?) insisted that he did.

But regardless of all his burdens and losses, the most admirable quality about Young was his ability to live in the present, which had its sweet and joyful moments. Sarah’s bedtime stories about the adventures of the Rabbbit (with three bs!), the Snail, and the Kitty (a lion really) who were best friends and lived in the Crazy Forest truly fascinated him. And how proud he was when Stephen won the annual math competition! It was sweet to see his shock when after his opening speech of the Mother’s Day festivities Sarah promptly delivered him with her Mother’s Day present (a drawing on which she wrote, “To DaDDy, the best moder in the world”). Or how finally laughter got the best of him as Stephen – with a very guilty face – was confessing a hilarious teenage prank.

This is how I would like to remember him and how I hope others will too.
 
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 ashimon
 
05:37pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
ashimon
Damn. I could not resist reading this. When I got to Matt hates fishing to this day I just came down with the biggest roar of laughter. (I would have laughed harder only if it turned out Young hated fishing just as much). Oh, and fun to see Crazy Forest's debut! ;)
 
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 shena8
 
08:05pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
Shenandoah Risu
The Rabbbit, The Snail and The Kitty... I think I've read this. Those three all love a certain Curlyhead to death! Love those Crazy Forest stories. And this was really very sweet, and very much in Chloe's character. The fact that she sat with him as he passed speaks how much she cared for him. I sure wish they hadn't cut the scene of Young doing the laundry at daybreak...
 
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 ashimon
 
08:15pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
ashimon
Ah, you almost got that Crazy Forest part right. I mean the alter egos. Except. Kitty is in fact a lion (not a lioness) and is the heir apparent to the throne of Crazy Forest. As a matter of fact he has recently acceded to the throne. :) I think I keep silent on the rest of the story just in case Sarah wants to tell it herself at a later point. :D
 
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 shena8
 
08:22pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
Shenandoah Risu
A PLOT BUNNY!!!!!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

^runs screaming into the... umm... afternoon...^
 
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 csiguci
 
08:26pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
csiguci
Young doing the laundry -- yes that is certainly for keep!
 
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 kimmy4eytj
 
08:43pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
kimmy4eytj: Young - lost

I'm afraid I don't know the story of the Crazy Forest. This is a wonderful scene. I love the sense of community that it brings, everyone pitching in to help one another just like he stated in his speech in Common Descent. My heart breaks for Young at TJ's death. Seeing him pour his love into his kids through Chloe's eyes is brilliant. Excellent work, Csiguci.
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 ashimon
 
08:47pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
ashimon
As a matter of fact Crazy Forest is a long running joke/story of the twins that made its first public appearance here. We kind of regret we never wrote it up as a children's book, but it seems we don't have the time.
 
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 shena8
 
08:55pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
Shenandoah Risu
For something utterly brilliant like that you have to MAKE time.

By special orders from Colonel Young himself!!!
 
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 csiguci
 
09:03pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
csiguci
oh, thank you. *blushing* it was so much fun to write this. i kept imagining what Young thought or how he might have responded to all this 'help'.
 
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 shena8
 
09:19pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
Shenandoah Risu
He probably made exactly that face (on your icon). He suffered quietly but accepted it. Especially if it was for his kids.
 
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 kimmy4eytj
 
09:53pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
kimmy4eytj: Young - lost

I think you got it right. Quiet unacknowledged dignity.
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 elaiel
 
10:52pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
elaiel
Wow, I loved this :D
 
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 csiguci
 
10:56pm 16/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
csiguci
Thank you. :)
 
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 mgsmurf
 
10:32pm 23/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
Cheryl McC: writing frustrated
What a lovely telling of who Young the man was on Novus, as a husband, friend and father. Well done.
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 csiguci
 
10:51pm 23/01/2012 (UTC)
 
 
csiguci
Thank you. *waves to smurf*
 
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